Process Writing

Process Writing: TIB

Rough Draft:

The Importance of Keeping a Promise Org

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 Peer Comments:

"You did a wonderful job stating your main belief and providing examples.  I think the 1st part of your paper could be imporved by stating "I" instead of "the child". I understand the use of it, but it made it hard for me to connect to the piece. I want to read about you!"

"You definitely need to elaborate on the ROTC example.

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 Revised Draft With Instructor Commentary:

For this draft I tried to follow the advice of my peers. I made my first example more personal, and added more details to the ROTC example.  I also tried to make the essay more personal whenever I could.

KAResponse to Budd Michael (TIB)

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Polished Draft:

  For this draft, I revised everything that Professor Andrews noted in my 2nd draft.  I have explained how certain things made me feel. I also added additional details to the ROTC example. These details were added to help the reader understand what a drill competition is.

The Importance of Keeping a Promise Polished

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Reflection:  

I chose this process, because it was the most extensive out of all the assignments to me. We had multiple peer reviews, and a review by the instructor. There are also four different drafts of this paper. One benefit of the peer review was me being able to see how others felt after reading my writing. My peers pointed out things that were unclear to them, or the things they couldn't relate to. I also learned what type of details I needed to add to my essay to be more personal. My professor also helped me to see where I could add or sentence or two more to help the reader feel how I felt during the time. The writing process itself was easy. The only challenge was the word limit.  I learned a valuable lesson from this writing process. Use your peers and professor whenever possible. They may have ideas that I probably wouldn't have thought about otherwise.